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So It Shall Be

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Okay, so, I wrote this recently, and I like it but I think it could be improved.

Critique: [link]

Thus, please answer these questions if you feel so inclined:

- does anything specifically stick out to you as needing improvement?
- how do you interpret the flow of emotions?
- is any phrase I use too cliched? (I hate cliches and I do my best to check myself against them, but sometimes a few slip through)

ALSO
I am so fed up with not getting the formatting right and pdfs not showing up. So this is a effing jpeg.

EDIT TRACKING:
-changed the title. Used to be "How Shall I Hate Thee?"
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wdnest's avatar
Lovely work here in life after love and wanting revenge congrats on this piece